Blog 28

Christopher Caruso
Blog #28

Evaluation

Focus - 40 points 
The essay presents a clear focus that links to two different objectives in the study.  First, find if there is truly a superior format of storytelling between the literary and cinematic formats respectively.  Second, find if the way that we take in and process the information in one format influences how we enjoy that format, or, if the way that we take in and process the information in on format influences how we experience the same story while in the other format.  The introduction sets up the significance that this study has in the field of writing studies, and refers back to the significance during the data analysis and the conclusion.  The Literature Review succeeds in setting up and defining any crucial terms that are either used throughout the case study, or would simply be needed by the reader to understand the context of what was going on during the study.

Audience/Genre - 38 points
Uses terms and language that sounds and professional, yet the language can be casual at times.  Each section opens up with why it is important and why it is absolutely needed in order to answer the questions presented in the focus.

 Organization - 26 points
All data is present and within their proper sections, with only a very minor overlap between sections.  Every term is defined in the Literature Review before being used or implemented in the essay. Each section has a proper noticeable heading, while each section follows proper paragraph structure.  Each section relates back the the focus in some way.

Development - 27 points
 Data analysis created a meaningful discussion of the ideas that the interviewees had to say about literature and cinema.  Frequent quotations were made from the interviews to either strengthen ideas or to prove a point about the data.  All of the examples relate back to answering the focus questions in the introduction.  Conclusion develops meaningful and understandable answers to the focus questions projected in the Introduction.

Correctness - 5 points
The essay is virtually clear of any spelling or grammatical errors.  Writing style remains clear, consistent, organized, and easy to understand throughout the essay.

Overall Essay Points - 136 points

Considering that the Data and Analysis section of my case study provided me with the most astounding of information that created new and previously unthought of ways of approaching the debate between literature and cinema, not to mention the deeply I analyzed the data in the essay, I honestly believe that I have earned the full 200 points.

The final version of my essay received a huge overhaul in terms of quality and organization since its initial concept.  The earliest blog post that bears a resemblance to the essay that I have now wold be Blog 23, which was essentially only a very rough analysis of the data found in my interviews and the significance of the data that was found.  Blog 24 was when I posted an early version of my first completed sections, which was Methods.  Blog 25 was when I posed my first official rough draft of the essay with all of its sections.  This was version of the essay was mostly an information dumb, as many of the sections were either incomplete, or lacking information entirely.  The data analysis was lacking any quotes at all and the Literature Review section had almost no information at all.  The grammar was also only partially acceptable, as several sections even contained half-completed ideas and sentences.  Blog 26 was a rough draft that has so far been the closest to being the final draft.  All of the quotes have been inserted into the essay, all of the terms have been defined, the grammatical structure is vastly improved and the essay actually conveyed an easy-to-follow stream of logic. Even though there is no Blog 27 listed, Blog 26 and Blog 27 are more or less one in the same.  There were no changes to the draft that were significant enough to justify posting what was essentially the exact same draft all over again, which was more or less a 97% completed version of the essay.  This case study gave me conclusions that I honestly did not expect while walking into the study.  Some of the data at first made me think of such different ideas to approaching the answer to the main question, that a few times I was almost tempted to go back and completely change the focus of my case study.  This study gave me new insights on how we process the information on a screen or in a book that previously never even crossed my mind, such as the fact that humans are stubborn by nature when it comes to seeing the same stories in new formats.  Even the idea that the experience that one has while watching a story in one format can directly create an immediate subconscious bias based on how we processed the story in the other format first. 

Overall, I believe that I scored 136 points out the the possible 150 points for writing process.  My reasoning for this is listed under each other the five sections in this blog post.